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1. 사는 곳 (장소묘사)

my hometown is ~ , 

I live with my family at the second floor of Villa. My villa is quite noisy, but I like living in it.

There are  kitchen, living room, bathroom, and two bedrooms. My bedroom is not spacious, I use the room as library.. It’s got a rug on the floor and a wooden desk with my books.

However, what sets this room apart from the others is that the structure of my room looks like a library.

whenever I come into my bedroom, I can get some knowledge. That’s my favorite time. Of all the rooms in my house, my bedroom is definitely my favorite place to have a free time. (집 구조와 좋아하는 방과 그 이유)

The only complaint I have is short of furniture.(가구가 부족하다) I have many books. So, I’m planning to get a new bookshelf. (방에 대한 불만)

I recently made changes to my bedroom. I put new wall paper on my walls yesterday. And I put a new closet in my room as well so that I can have more storage space. I am very pleased with the changes because everything looks more organized. (방에 준 변화)